Monthly Archives: September 2011

"Bitten" By Merrill Gemus

     Ok, we’ve all heard it before. You get what you pay for. And, since I didn’t pay for this, I’ve only myself to blame.

     Product description: When Ally becomes a newly single woman, she is determined to meet the man of her dreams. Never truly expecting it to actually occur, she is amaze to find herself drawn to a dark, mysterious stranger leaning against the bar. He was utterly irresistible.

     Despite her friends’ protests, she willingly follows him outside the bar and soon realizes that her world will never be the same again.

      Well, for a free book, I thought it sounded pretty good. And, I suppose for a free book, it was. I guess. I read it last night while I was at work on a break. It doesn’t take long. I guess you could say that I wasted my time with this one. Um, yeah, you’d be right about that. I should have realized from the spelling error in the product description that it was riddled with them. I just thought it was a typo.

     Ally rolled her eyes and headed towards the bar. What in the hell were they talking about? Peculiar? Mr. Sexy Vampire was the most luscious guy in this club. Probably in this entire city! For Pete’s sake, it’s a miracle that no other girl has even noticed him yet! Perhaps, Pam and Trish couldn’t see him well under the dim light of the bar, Ally mused. Boy, will they kick themselves tomorrow when they see him in broad daylight.

     Dashing through the dance floor, she made her way towards him. Unbelievably, the room was even more crowded than when she first arrived. For every step forward she took, it felt like she was taking two steps back. Holy cow! What was the maximum capacity in this club? Wasn’t this against regulations? It was a good thing she wasn’t claustrophobic. After what seemed like an eternity, she finally managed to get within a few feet from the bar. She looked up and gazed at Mr. Sexy Vampire. He had a faint smile on his sumptuous lips and raised his glass to them, slowly sipping his beverage. Ally sucked in an astonished breath. Oh God, the man was tempting.

     Ok, well, you can see what I’m dealing with here. Grammatical and spelling errors, and it flipped back and forth between tenses all throughout the novella. It was quite painful to read.

     Ally and her friends, Pam and Trish, are going to the Flambe club for a Halloween party. Her boyfriend text her, breaking up with her after 8 months. She decides, instead of going to the Halloween party as a cutesy Little Bo Peep as she had planned when she was going with her boyfriend, now that she was single, she decided to sass it up and go as a sexy vampire.

     The music is loud, the dancing wild. She bumps into a stranger and he keeps her from falling over. She thinks he’s gorgeous and wants to “get to know him”, if you know what I mean. But, just as she is about to say something, he turns away from her and goes to sit at the bar.

     Everyone pretty much ignores him, feeling repulsed by him. The friends don’t think he’s “all that” and the waitress stays as far away from him as possible. Ally can’t understand because she thinks he’s so hot looking.

     As she approaches the bar, he disappears from his seat. She looks for him frantically and finds him about to exit the bar through the back door. Stupidly, she follows him.

     Long story short, he goes to this other more underground bar; a secret bar, full of real vampires, banshees (really) and possibly even trolls. But, as things get tense in there, he asks her to come back to his place. Stupidly, she goes.

     They have sex and he bites her wrist. A sort of “love bite”, meaning that once he bites her, the transformation takes place. Not only that, but now that he has bitten her, they are now “mates”.

     That doesn’t go over very well with his betrothed. She finds out.

     Uh oh.

     Here is a passage that is so riddled with mistakes, it’s funny. Truly, the way it is written here is the way it is written in the book. I kid you not.

     “Geez, what is the matter with me?” she muttered. Here she was obsessively stalking this man, gaping at his buttocks and lean thighs, and yet she was not even concern about her safety or how he will feel or react once he realize that she have followed him from Flambe. Honestly, he could be a serial killer and she was just some stupid girl who was falling for his trap.

     It seemed that this book was written by a teenager. Maybe it was. Definitely this book could use the aid of an editor or, at the very least, a friend to say, “Hey, that doesn’t sound right.” It almost looks like the author wrote it down on a piece of paper, and someone just typed it the way it was written. And, it’s apparent that the author didn’t go back and re-read it and re-read it again, checking for those errors. It’s possible the author has English as a second language.

     This book also leaves you hanging at the end. There is another book (which I also “bought” for free) called, “Stolen”. Since I have it already, I will read it. But, only because I already have it. I will likely send it to the ‘archived items’ list on my Kindle.
    
     Worth the read….? No.

     I give it one star, and that’s being mighty generous.


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Free Books!

     I’ve never done this before, other than to a few friends and that was giving it to them via emails. I never thought it possible before being published, that I would ever BE published. And, I never thought that I would meet an amazing bunch of people who have supported all my endeavours.

     But, I have.

     So, I bring to you a product code for a free book. It’s a YA Paranormal Romance that I wrote back in 2009. Here is the back cover synopsis for this book.

Eighteen year old RileyAbbott is about to meet the man from her past life dreams.


     Riley has been having some weirddreams lately. But, that’s nothing new. Riley already has some prettyweird traits—telekinesis, astral travel and mind-reading abilities,to name a few. But, her dreams are so real to her, that her handsache in the morning from pushing the heavy fruit cart down the pathto the marketplace in her dreams. She even feels the kisses of theman that’s in her dreams.
     Riley discovers that the dreams she isexperiencing are past life dreams. She begins to believe this whenshe goes to University, and she meets Michael, a guy that when shelooks into his eyes, she sees the man from her dreams, and she knowsthey have to be together. As their young love blooms, her dreamsreveal to her that Michael could be in danger.

    

     When another mind-reader, Brenda, won’tleave him alone, and threatens the lives of both Riley and Michael,Riley vows to do anything to keep him alive.
     This book is available at www.amazon.com and it’s also available at www.smashwords.com. Just type in my name or the name of the book at either site and the book will come up.
     However, for a limited time, it will be available for free download at Smashwords. You’ll need the product coupon code which is: DZ23D
     Bestselling Author, Norma Beishir is also giving away a couple of books at Smashwords. Her books are amazing…and well, she’s a bestselling author! They should be amazing!

     In the wake of her newest novel’s release, “Army Of Angel’s”, she is giving away the first book in the series called, “Chasing The Wind.” If you would like to get this book, it is also available at Amazon but is free at Smashwords. The product coupon code is: PP77S

     Norma is also graciously giving away a copy of one of my favourite books of hers called, “Final Hours.” The product coupon code is: AK29L

     If you would like to see what these books are about and to download them for free, please visit www.smashwords.com and use these promotional product coupon codes. They are well worth it!

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A Short Story By Eve Gaal Called, "Loser’s Ledge "

     I’ve only written one review for a short story before and it didn’t turn out well. This one, however, was well written, the character was developed and well worth the few minutes it takes to read it.

     In this anthology collection, “Fiction Noir: Thirteen Stories”, the author’s story is the first one. It is a sad tale of depression, angst and regret. The author successfully pulled me into her story, making me feel like I was Viola, the main character of the story.

    There wasn’t a trace of fear left in her heart, but her faucet of promise and hope had long ago broken. Culminations of her misfortunes were overflowing in her mind.

     One seemingly small mistake made ten years ago had morphed into a six hundred pound gorilla on her back, weighing her down and making her feel lost, unwanted and alone. Unforgiven. A simple but massive blunder that fogged up all of her good memories and all her judgement by clouding her brain with self-pity and loathing. Sneezing from the fumes coming up from the street, she wiped her nose and knew she couldn’t go back in time. She had to face the consequences…she had to jump.

     In this story, I felt like Viola. I could feel her pain and anguish over the mistake that she had made. It was an honest mistake, a mistake that she lived with for a long time. When she couldn’t stand it any longer, she made a choice. A choice so severe, that nothing and no one could ever bring her back in from the ledge.

     When a phone call disrupts her attempts at a swan dive into the depths of Hell, she answers it to find a concerned voice on the other end. Although she thought no one would miss her, someone would.

     This story showed heartbreak, sorrow, love, self-loathing and hope. I can’t tell you how it ends; you’ll have to read it for yourself. But, I will say that it is a story worth reading.

     Maybe it’s because I feel like Viola sometimes.

     The rest of the stories I haven’t read yet, but I will. Then I will do another review of the book as a whole. At this point, I give this story 5 stars.
  

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